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Birds fly about in the shining ,scorching sun. I walk down the street, I don’t know where I am. I try to scream hello but my throat is so dry I can’t scream, I can’t even talk.
I run over to a house and knock on a front door, ring the door bell no answer. Run to the other house next door again no answer I’m very puzzled. But the side gate of the house is open, I run round the side and start thumping on the back door.
The back door fly’s open I run inside and look around. My eyes wondering around the kitchen that I have just ran into. Ah a bottle on the side a lovely bottle of clear water right there on the side. I pick it up rip off the lid and throw the water down my throat, oh so lovely. I can now scream hello but still no reply just a silence you could hear a pin drop.
I look everywhere around the house no not a soul in this house. But there is some car keys on the hall table, I pick them up run outside and press the button. Opening a lovely silver car so shiny. I go and open the car door smell the leather the lovely smooth leather. I have never really been a big car fan but this car wow it was great. I started up the car then drove off down the road whoa was this fast.
I couldn’t get a speeding ticket now and no-one was around so nothing would happen. The streets were filled with rubbish rats ran around. Rats were the only form of life. I switched on the radio the radio to find out what was really happening. Started tuning it in it was just fuzzy. But then I found something but it was just some creepy music.
But I kept it on to see what happened, the music was some sort of strange piano and violin. It then stopped and there was silence for about ten seconds then a voice started talking.
The voice was a very scary voice that sent shivers down my spine. The voice said “they are coming, they will find you, today you will die” I was lost for words a new bit of music then started again. This time the music was just piano but really sharp bits.
I switched it off then drove round the corner. Who is they? What will they do? Will I die today?
I stopped and turned into a alleyway. I locked all the doors and looked in my rear mirror. A person stood on the path behind me in a black hoodie. They turned sideways I saw the person’s face it was a boy.
Under his eyes were red his face was white. This wasn’t going to be another one of the stupid zombie things was it? He started running towards the car his fist smashed through the sun roof. I unlocked the door jumped out then….
I run over to a house and knock on a front door, ring the door bell no answer. Run to the other house next door again no answer I’m very puzzled. But the side gate of the house is open, I run round the side and start thumping on the back door.
The back door fly’s open I run inside and look around. My eyes wondering around the kitchen that I have just ran into. Ah a bottle on the side a lovely bottle of clear water right there on the side. I pick it up rip off the lid and throw the water down my throat, oh so lovely. I can now scream hello but still no reply just a silence you could hear a pin drop.
I look everywhere around the house no not a soul in this house. But there is some car keys on the hall table, I pick them up run outside and press the button. Opening a lovely silver car so shiny. I go and open the car door smell the leather the lovely smooth leather. I have never really been a big car fan but this car wow it was great. I started up the car then drove off down the road whoa was this fast.
I couldn’t get a speeding ticket now and no-one was around so nothing would happen. The streets were filled with rubbish rats ran around. Rats were the only form of life. I switched on the radio the radio to find out what was really happening. Started tuning it in it was just fuzzy. But then I found something but it was just some creepy music.
But I kept it on to see what happened, the music was some sort of strange piano and violin. It then stopped and there was silence for about ten seconds then a voice started talking.
The voice was a very scary voice that sent shivers down my spine. The voice said “they are coming, they will find you, today you will die” I was lost for words a new bit of music then started again. This time the music was just piano but really sharp bits.
I switched it off then drove round the corner. Who is they? What will they do? Will I die today?
I stopped and turned into a alleyway. I locked all the doors and looked in my rear mirror. A person stood on the path behind me in a black hoodie. They turned sideways I saw the person’s face it was a boy.
Under his eyes were red his face was white. This wasn’t going to be another one of the stupid zombie things was it? He started running towards the car his fist smashed through the sun roof. I unlocked the door jumped out then….
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The next one will coz this finishes with then.... and the next bit begins with ran down the alleyway past the boy smashing through the sun-roof,and getting into the car.
Just a hint Bob, each formula gets boring after the 1st attempt, there really is no need to keep writing another chapter. They don't link together well enough either.
Well chapter two is being started of this now.
He's changed his name now anyway.
tell your friend he spelt sergeant wrong
I do. [URL]http://img419.imageshack.us/img419/7625/ido4lk.jpg[/URL]
Yeah LIE.
Yes but I have Microsoft works word Processer.
Did you write this in Word, Crossbob?
No read the rest and you just have to have the sort of view of a man looking up in the sky. Crows are flying about and the sun is shining on them.
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