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Today will be today,tomorrow will be tomorrow. But the Skateboarding will be tomorrow,today and yesterday. The skateboarding will never stop. I jump on my skateboard jumped some steps smashed to the ground and showed off my style. I ran down the road and jumped a metal pole grinding as I went along scraping along and making sparks fly like a fire exploding in to bits. Then I dropped down I flipped I flew like a bird flying into the sky. I was great this was so good.
I ran into a shopping center then I jumped back on my board and sped off though the shopping center. I heard screams of guards they were coming to get me I jumped over a ledge down on to a little water. I kick-flipped off of it. I heard a guard behind me I zoomed off not letting him grab me.
I smashed though the back doors of the building on to the road. I scarped on the front of a car and dropped to the road. A car drove in front of me I grabbed the back of it and it dragged me along on my skateboard. I was coming towards a road. But then by mistake I slipped from my skateboard it flew under the wheels crushing it instanly. I tried to move but my body was dragged under the wheels too squashing me. Killing me straight away with my crushed up skateboard making me lose my style.
I was dead but at least maybe I could skateboard in the heavens now and my wings would make me get higher on my skateboard.
I ran into a shopping center then I jumped back on my board and sped off though the shopping center. I heard screams of guards they were coming to get me I jumped over a ledge down on to a little water. I kick-flipped off of it. I heard a guard behind me I zoomed off not letting him grab me.
I smashed though the back doors of the building on to the road. I scarped on the front of a car and dropped to the road. A car drove in front of me I grabbed the back of it and it dragged me along on my skateboard. I was coming towards a road. But then by mistake I slipped from my skateboard it flew under the wheels crushing it instanly. I tried to move but my body was dragged under the wheels too squashing me. Killing me straight away with my crushed up skateboard making me lose my style.
I was dead but at least maybe I could skateboard in the heavens now and my wings would make me get higher on my skateboard.
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Today will be today,tomorrow will be tomorrow. But the Skateboarding will be tomorrow,today and yesterday. The skateboarding will never stop. I jump on my skateboard jumped some steps smashed to the ground and showed off my style. I ran down the road and jumped a metal pole grinding as I went along scraping along and making sparks fly like a fire exploding in to bits. Then I dropped down I flipped I flew like a bird flying into the sky. I was great this was so good.
I ran into a shopping center then I jumped back on my board and sped off though the shopping center. I heard screams of guards they were coming to get me I jumped over a ledge down on to a little water. I kick-flipped off of it. I heard a guard behind me I zoomed off not letting him grab me.
I smashed though the back doors of the building on to the road. I scarped on the front of a car and dropped to the road. A car drove in front of me I grabbed the back of it and it dragged me along on my skateboard. I was coming towards a road. But then by mistake I slipped from my skateboard it flew under the wheels crushing it instanly. I tried to move but my body was dragged under the wheels too squashing me. Killing me straight away with my crushed up skateboard making me lose my style.
I was dead but at least maybe I could skateboard in the heavens now and my wings would make me get higher on my skateboard.
I ran into a shopping center then I jumped back on my board and sped off though the shopping center. I heard screams of guards they were coming to get me I jumped over a ledge down on to a little water. I kick-flipped off of it. I heard a guard behind me I zoomed off not letting him grab me.
I smashed though the back doors of the building on to the road. I scarped on the front of a car and dropped to the road. A car drove in front of me I grabbed the back of it and it dragged me along on my skateboard. I was coming towards a road. But then by mistake I slipped from my skateboard it flew under the wheels crushing it instanly. I tried to move but my body was dragged under the wheels too squashing me. Killing me straight away with my crushed up skateboard making me lose my style.
I was dead but at least maybe I could skateboard in the heavens now and my wings would make me get higher on my skateboard.
It's magic, it really is.
How do you get such great and imaginative ideas Crossbob?
Yeah
Mike Swade wrote:
> How do you get such great and imaginative ideas Crossbob?
I just do im great!
> How do you get such great and imaginative ideas Crossbob?
I just do im great!
C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> Mike Swade wrote:
> How do you get such great and imaginative ideas Crossbob?
>
> I just do im great!
You crack me up crossbob, you really do.
> Mike Swade wrote:
> How do you get such great and imaginative ideas Crossbob?
>
> I just do im great!
You crack me up crossbob, you really do.
JFH wrote:
> C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> Mike Swade wrote:
> How do you get such great and imaginative ideas Crossbob?
>
> I just do im great!
>
> You crack me up crossbob, you really do.
Thank you!!!!
> C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> Mike Swade wrote:
> How do you get such great and imaginative ideas Crossbob?
>
> I just do im great!
>
> You crack me up crossbob, you really do.
Thank you!!!!
Honestly, I think the first paragraph is amongst the best things you've written - for instance the description of the sparks etc, you need to put that kind of detail in the rest of the story too in order to start improving your writing.
...then I turned off Tony Hawk's Underground
Cross Bob, read a good short story. Then read your efforts. Spot the difference(s).
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