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Andy was sitting at home, playing Half Life 2, when suddenly, a man appeared behind him,
"Hello there, young mortal, I am Q of the Q continuum. I am afraid you are to be punished", Q said with an echoing voice.
"What? Punished! For what?" questioned Andy, in a rather anxious tone.
"For humanities corruption on the minds of innocent children with all these violent coputer games", echoed Q.
And with that, he clicked his fingers and Andy disappeared from his room. About 10 seconds later, he re-appeared again in what he thought was just another part of the world. But, when he gathered his thoughts, he realised that he had been placed in Half Life 2.
A voice echoed around him, "Your punishment is to face the violence in games, and suffer the consequences for humanities violence". And then it was silent.
Andy just stood there, trying to get a grasp of what the hell was going on. First, Q, a being claiming to be from the Q continuum, appears and picks on him for humanaties discretions in video games, and then places him in the game that he was playing just ten minutes ago. What kind of a fream is this?
"What is this? GET BACK HERE", Andy shouted, hoping that Q would take him home.
"WHY ME? WHAT HAVE I DONE TO DESERVE THIS?", he ranted.
He then stopped. Andy heard something in the distance. He stayed quite, with the only thing distracting from the noise being his own heartbeat, which seemed to get louder every second. He looks around for anything he could use as a weapon, and, to his delight, but not surprise, was a crowbar. "Fancy finding a crowbar in a place like this", he says to himself, thinking of the irony of all this.
Andy thought of hiding, but the curiosity was overwelming. He just had to have a look, to see one of the head-crab zombies for himself. He walked forward slowly, grasping hold of the crowbar so tight that it would almost kill him if he let go. Each step seemed, not only like a step closer to death, but a step closer to a dream. A dream where he is Gordon Freeman, and the world is out to get him.
His impatience takes over, and he begins to walk faster. Not far now. He gets to the destination of the noise. Nothing. Nothing there at all.
"WHAT, AAHH!!!", Andy screams, as two headcrabs jump out from under a car door. He falls to the floor. He looks up, and then swings the crowbar with a quick reflex, knocking one of the headcrabs for six into some flames nearby. He then pays all of his attentions on the remaining headcrab, waiting for it to pounce. But, it's hesitating, learning from what just happened. Andy, gets to his feet, and the headcrab takes has chance. Andy grabs the headcrab, with it mouthy pincers inches away from his face, and then throws it on to the flames as well.
Andy, still trying hard to beleive this is happening, catches his breath. But, no time, as he turns around and......TO BE CONTINUED
"Hello there, young mortal, I am Q of the Q continuum. I am afraid you are to be punished", Q said with an echoing voice.
"What? Punished! For what?" questioned Andy, in a rather anxious tone.
"For humanities corruption on the minds of innocent children with all these violent coputer games", echoed Q.
And with that, he clicked his fingers and Andy disappeared from his room. About 10 seconds later, he re-appeared again in what he thought was just another part of the world. But, when he gathered his thoughts, he realised that he had been placed in Half Life 2.
A voice echoed around him, "Your punishment is to face the violence in games, and suffer the consequences for humanities violence". And then it was silent.
Andy just stood there, trying to get a grasp of what the hell was going on. First, Q, a being claiming to be from the Q continuum, appears and picks on him for humanaties discretions in video games, and then places him in the game that he was playing just ten minutes ago. What kind of a fream is this?
"What is this? GET BACK HERE", Andy shouted, hoping that Q would take him home.
"WHY ME? WHAT HAVE I DONE TO DESERVE THIS?", he ranted.
He then stopped. Andy heard something in the distance. He stayed quite, with the only thing distracting from the noise being his own heartbeat, which seemed to get louder every second. He looks around for anything he could use as a weapon, and, to his delight, but not surprise, was a crowbar. "Fancy finding a crowbar in a place like this", he says to himself, thinking of the irony of all this.
Andy thought of hiding, but the curiosity was overwelming. He just had to have a look, to see one of the head-crab zombies for himself. He walked forward slowly, grasping hold of the crowbar so tight that it would almost kill him if he let go. Each step seemed, not only like a step closer to death, but a step closer to a dream. A dream where he is Gordon Freeman, and the world is out to get him.
His impatience takes over, and he begins to walk faster. Not far now. He gets to the destination of the noise. Nothing. Nothing there at all.
"WHAT, AAHH!!!", Andy screams, as two headcrabs jump out from under a car door. He falls to the floor. He looks up, and then swings the crowbar with a quick reflex, knocking one of the headcrabs for six into some flames nearby. He then pays all of his attentions on the remaining headcrab, waiting for it to pounce. But, it's hesitating, learning from what just happened. Andy, gets to his feet, and the headcrab takes has chance. Andy grabs the headcrab, with it mouthy pincers inches away from his face, and then throws it on to the flames as well.
Andy, still trying hard to beleive this is happening, catches his breath. But, no time, as he turns around and......TO BE CONTINUED
Ah - How could I forget?
> hobo doesn't like anything... Apart from Norway, Sigur Ros,
> "Apocalypse Now Redux" and paintballing.
You're forgetting suicidal expeditions
> "Apocalypse Now Redux" and paintballing.
You're forgetting suicidal expeditions
The G man wrote:
> Didn't like it then Hobo
hobo doesn't like anything... Apart from Norway, Sigur Ros, "Apocalypse Now Redux" and paintballing.
> Didn't like it then Hobo
hobo doesn't like anything... Apart from Norway, Sigur Ros, "Apocalypse Now Redux" and paintballing.
stridman wrote:
> The G man wrote:
> Andy was sitting at home, playing Half Life 2, when suddenly, a man
> appeared behind him,
> "Hello there, young mortal, I am Q of the Q continuum. I am
> afraid you are to be punished", Q said with an echoing voice.
> "What? Punished! For what?" questioned Andy, in a rather
> anxious tone.
> "For humanities corruption on the minds of innocent children
> with all these violent coputer games", echoed Q.
> And with that, he clicked his fingers and Andy disappeared from his
> room. About 10 seconds later, he re-appeared again in what he
> thought
> was just another part of the world. But, when he gathered his
> thoughts, he realised that he had been placed in Half Life 2.
>
> A voice echoed around him, "Your punishment is to face the
> violence in games, and suffer the consequences for humanities
> violence". And then it was silent.
>
> Andy just stood there, trying to get a grasp of what the hell was
> going on. First, Q, a being claiming to be from the Q continuum,
> appears and picks on him for humanaties discretions in video games,
> and then places him in the game that he was playing just ten minutes
> ago. What kind of a fream is this?
>
> "What is this? GET BACK HERE", Andy shouted, hoping that
> Q would take him home.
> "WHY ME? WHAT HAVE I DONE TO DESERVE THIS?", he ranted.
>
> He then stopped. Andy heard something in the distance. He stayed
> quite, with the only thing distracting from the noise being his own
> heartbeat, which seemed to get louder every second. He looks around
> for anything he could use as a weapon, and, to his delight, but not
> surprise, was a crowbar. "Fancy finding a crowbar in a place
> like this", he says to himself, thinking of the irony of all
> this.
> Andy thought of hiding, but the curiosity was overwelming. He just
> had to have a look, to see one of the head-crab zombies for himself.
> He walked forward slowly, grasping hold of the crowbar so tight that
> it would almost kill him if he let go. Each step seemed, not only
> like a step closer to death, but a step closer to a dream. A dream
> where he is Gordon Freeman, and the world is out to get him.
> His impatience takes over, and he begins to walk faster. Not far
> now. He gets to the destination of the noise. Nothing. Nothing there
> at all.
> "WHAT, AAHH!!!", Andy screams, as two headcrabs jump out
> from under a car door. He falls to the floor. He looks up, and then
> swings the crowbar with a quick reflex, knocking one of the
> headcrabs
> for six into some flames nearby. He then pays all of his attentions
> on the remaining headcrab, waiting for it to pounce. But, it's
> hesitating, learning from what just happened. Andy, gets to his
> feet,
> and the headcrab takes has chance. Andy grabs the headcrab, with it
> mouthy pincers inches away from his face, and then throws it on to
> the flames as well.
>
> Andy, still trying hard to beleive this is happening, catches his
> breath. But, no time, as he turns around and......TO BE CONTINUED
>
> I liked this one
You just want your word count up, don't you?
> The G man wrote:
> Andy was sitting at home, playing Half Life 2, when suddenly, a man
> appeared behind him,
> "Hello there, young mortal, I am Q of the Q continuum. I am
> afraid you are to be punished", Q said with an echoing voice.
> "What? Punished! For what?" questioned Andy, in a rather
> anxious tone.
> "For humanities corruption on the minds of innocent children
> with all these violent coputer games", echoed Q.
> And with that, he clicked his fingers and Andy disappeared from his
> room. About 10 seconds later, he re-appeared again in what he
> thought
> was just another part of the world. But, when he gathered his
> thoughts, he realised that he had been placed in Half Life 2.
>
> A voice echoed around him, "Your punishment is to face the
> violence in games, and suffer the consequences for humanities
> violence". And then it was silent.
>
> Andy just stood there, trying to get a grasp of what the hell was
> going on. First, Q, a being claiming to be from the Q continuum,
> appears and picks on him for humanaties discretions in video games,
> and then places him in the game that he was playing just ten minutes
> ago. What kind of a fream is this?
>
> "What is this? GET BACK HERE", Andy shouted, hoping that
> Q would take him home.
> "WHY ME? WHAT HAVE I DONE TO DESERVE THIS?", he ranted.
>
> He then stopped. Andy heard something in the distance. He stayed
> quite, with the only thing distracting from the noise being his own
> heartbeat, which seemed to get louder every second. He looks around
> for anything he could use as a weapon, and, to his delight, but not
> surprise, was a crowbar. "Fancy finding a crowbar in a place
> like this", he says to himself, thinking of the irony of all
> this.
> Andy thought of hiding, but the curiosity was overwelming. He just
> had to have a look, to see one of the head-crab zombies for himself.
> He walked forward slowly, grasping hold of the crowbar so tight that
> it would almost kill him if he let go. Each step seemed, not only
> like a step closer to death, but a step closer to a dream. A dream
> where he is Gordon Freeman, and the world is out to get him.
> His impatience takes over, and he begins to walk faster. Not far
> now. He gets to the destination of the noise. Nothing. Nothing there
> at all.
> "WHAT, AAHH!!!", Andy screams, as two headcrabs jump out
> from under a car door. He falls to the floor. He looks up, and then
> swings the crowbar with a quick reflex, knocking one of the
> headcrabs
> for six into some flames nearby. He then pays all of his attentions
> on the remaining headcrab, waiting for it to pounce. But, it's
> hesitating, learning from what just happened. Andy, gets to his
> feet,
> and the headcrab takes has chance. Andy grabs the headcrab, with it
> mouthy pincers inches away from his face, and then throws it on to
> the flames as well.
>
> Andy, still trying hard to beleive this is happening, catches his
> breath. But, no time, as he turns around and......TO BE CONTINUED
>
> I liked this one
You just want your word count up, don't you?
It's alright, just slightly cliched. Keep at it though.
Didn't like it then Hobo
Yes, it is even worse when you do that.
Why repeat the whole thing?
The G man wrote:
> Andy was sitting at home, playing Half Life 2, when suddenly, a man
> appeared behind him,
> "Hello there, young mortal, I am Q of the Q continuum. I am
> afraid you are to be punished", Q said with an echoing voice.
> "What? Punished! For what?" questioned Andy, in a rather
> anxious tone.
> "For humanities corruption on the minds of innocent children
> with all these violent coputer games", echoed Q.
> And with that, he clicked his fingers and Andy disappeared from his
> room. About 10 seconds later, he re-appeared again in what he thought
> was just another part of the world. But, when he gathered his
> thoughts, he realised that he had been placed in Half Life 2.
>
> A voice echoed around him, "Your punishment is to face the
> violence in games, and suffer the consequences for humanities
> violence". And then it was silent.
>
> Andy just stood there, trying to get a grasp of what the hell was
> going on. First, Q, a being claiming to be from the Q continuum,
> appears and picks on him for humanaties discretions in video games,
> and then places him in the game that he was playing just ten minutes
> ago. What kind of a fream is this?
>
> "What is this? GET BACK HERE", Andy shouted, hoping that
> Q would take him home.
> "WHY ME? WHAT HAVE I DONE TO DESERVE THIS?", he ranted.
>
> He then stopped. Andy heard something in the distance. He stayed
> quite, with the only thing distracting from the noise being his own
> heartbeat, which seemed to get louder every second. He looks around
> for anything he could use as a weapon, and, to his delight, but not
> surprise, was a crowbar. "Fancy finding a crowbar in a place
> like this", he says to himself, thinking of the irony of all
> this.
> Andy thought of hiding, but the curiosity was overwelming. He just
> had to have a look, to see one of the head-crab zombies for himself.
> He walked forward slowly, grasping hold of the crowbar so tight that
> it would almost kill him if he let go. Each step seemed, not only
> like a step closer to death, but a step closer to a dream. A dream
> where he is Gordon Freeman, and the world is out to get him.
> His impatience takes over, and he begins to walk faster. Not far
> now. He gets to the destination of the noise. Nothing. Nothing there
> at all.
> "WHAT, AAHH!!!", Andy screams, as two headcrabs jump out
> from under a car door. He falls to the floor. He looks up, and then
> swings the crowbar with a quick reflex, knocking one of the headcrabs
> for six into some flames nearby. He then pays all of his attentions
> on the remaining headcrab, waiting for it to pounce. But, it's
> hesitating, learning from what just happened. Andy, gets to his feet,
> and the headcrab takes has chance. Andy grabs the headcrab, with it
> mouthy pincers inches away from his face, and then throws it on to
> the flames as well.
>
> Andy, still trying hard to beleive this is happening, catches his
> breath. But, no time, as he turns around and......TO BE CONTINUED
I liked this one
> Andy was sitting at home, playing Half Life 2, when suddenly, a man
> appeared behind him,
> "Hello there, young mortal, I am Q of the Q continuum. I am
> afraid you are to be punished", Q said with an echoing voice.
> "What? Punished! For what?" questioned Andy, in a rather
> anxious tone.
> "For humanities corruption on the minds of innocent children
> with all these violent coputer games", echoed Q.
> And with that, he clicked his fingers and Andy disappeared from his
> room. About 10 seconds later, he re-appeared again in what he thought
> was just another part of the world. But, when he gathered his
> thoughts, he realised that he had been placed in Half Life 2.
>
> A voice echoed around him, "Your punishment is to face the
> violence in games, and suffer the consequences for humanities
> violence". And then it was silent.
>
> Andy just stood there, trying to get a grasp of what the hell was
> going on. First, Q, a being claiming to be from the Q continuum,
> appears and picks on him for humanaties discretions in video games,
> and then places him in the game that he was playing just ten minutes
> ago. What kind of a fream is this?
>
> "What is this? GET BACK HERE", Andy shouted, hoping that
> Q would take him home.
> "WHY ME? WHAT HAVE I DONE TO DESERVE THIS?", he ranted.
>
> He then stopped. Andy heard something in the distance. He stayed
> quite, with the only thing distracting from the noise being his own
> heartbeat, which seemed to get louder every second. He looks around
> for anything he could use as a weapon, and, to his delight, but not
> surprise, was a crowbar. "Fancy finding a crowbar in a place
> like this", he says to himself, thinking of the irony of all
> this.
> Andy thought of hiding, but the curiosity was overwelming. He just
> had to have a look, to see one of the head-crab zombies for himself.
> He walked forward slowly, grasping hold of the crowbar so tight that
> it would almost kill him if he let go. Each step seemed, not only
> like a step closer to death, but a step closer to a dream. A dream
> where he is Gordon Freeman, and the world is out to get him.
> His impatience takes over, and he begins to walk faster. Not far
> now. He gets to the destination of the noise. Nothing. Nothing there
> at all.
> "WHAT, AAHH!!!", Andy screams, as two headcrabs jump out
> from under a car door. He falls to the floor. He looks up, and then
> swings the crowbar with a quick reflex, knocking one of the headcrabs
> for six into some flames nearby. He then pays all of his attentions
> on the remaining headcrab, waiting for it to pounce. But, it's
> hesitating, learning from what just happened. Andy, gets to his feet,
> and the headcrab takes has chance. Andy grabs the headcrab, with it
> mouthy pincers inches away from his face, and then throws it on to
> the flames as well.
>
> Andy, still trying hard to beleive this is happening, catches his
> breath. But, no time, as he turns around and......TO BE CONTINUED
I liked this one
Andy was sitting at home, playing Half Life 2, when suddenly, a man appeared behind him,
"Hello there, young mortal, I am Q of the Q continuum. I am afraid you are to be punished", Q said with an echoing voice.
"What? Punished! For what?" questioned Andy, in a rather anxious tone.
"For humanities corruption on the minds of innocent children with all these violent coputer games", echoed Q.
And with that, he clicked his fingers and Andy disappeared from his room. About 10 seconds later, he re-appeared again in what he thought was just another part of the world. But, when he gathered his thoughts, he realised that he had been placed in Half Life 2.
A voice echoed around him, "Your punishment is to face the violence in games, and suffer the consequences for humanities violence". And then it was silent.
Andy just stood there, trying to get a grasp of what the hell was going on. First, Q, a being claiming to be from the Q continuum, appears and picks on him for humanaties discretions in video games, and then places him in the game that he was playing just ten minutes ago. What kind of a fream is this?
"What is this? GET BACK HERE", Andy shouted, hoping that Q would take him home.
"WHY ME? WHAT HAVE I DONE TO DESERVE THIS?", he ranted.
He then stopped. Andy heard something in the distance. He stayed quite, with the only thing distracting from the noise being his own heartbeat, which seemed to get louder every second. He looks around for anything he could use as a weapon, and, to his delight, but not surprise, was a crowbar. "Fancy finding a crowbar in a place like this", he says to himself, thinking of the irony of all this.
Andy thought of hiding, but the curiosity was overwelming. He just had to have a look, to see one of the head-crab zombies for himself. He walked forward slowly, grasping hold of the crowbar so tight that it would almost kill him if he let go. Each step seemed, not only like a step closer to death, but a step closer to a dream. A dream where he is Gordon Freeman, and the world is out to get him.
His impatience takes over, and he begins to walk faster. Not far now. He gets to the destination of the noise. Nothing. Nothing there at all.
"WHAT, AAHH!!!", Andy screams, as two headcrabs jump out from under a car door. He falls to the floor. He looks up, and then swings the crowbar with a quick reflex, knocking one of the headcrabs for six into some flames nearby. He then pays all of his attentions on the remaining headcrab, waiting for it to pounce. But, it's hesitating, learning from what just happened. Andy, gets to his feet, and the headcrab takes has chance. Andy grabs the headcrab, with it mouthy pincers inches away from his face, and then throws it on to the flames as well.
Andy, still trying hard to beleive this is happening, catches his breath. But, no time, as he turns around and......TO BE CONTINUED
"Hello there, young mortal, I am Q of the Q continuum. I am afraid you are to be punished", Q said with an echoing voice.
"What? Punished! For what?" questioned Andy, in a rather anxious tone.
"For humanities corruption on the minds of innocent children with all these violent coputer games", echoed Q.
And with that, he clicked his fingers and Andy disappeared from his room. About 10 seconds later, he re-appeared again in what he thought was just another part of the world. But, when he gathered his thoughts, he realised that he had been placed in Half Life 2.
A voice echoed around him, "Your punishment is to face the violence in games, and suffer the consequences for humanities violence". And then it was silent.
Andy just stood there, trying to get a grasp of what the hell was going on. First, Q, a being claiming to be from the Q continuum, appears and picks on him for humanaties discretions in video games, and then places him in the game that he was playing just ten minutes ago. What kind of a fream is this?
"What is this? GET BACK HERE", Andy shouted, hoping that Q would take him home.
"WHY ME? WHAT HAVE I DONE TO DESERVE THIS?", he ranted.
He then stopped. Andy heard something in the distance. He stayed quite, with the only thing distracting from the noise being his own heartbeat, which seemed to get louder every second. He looks around for anything he could use as a weapon, and, to his delight, but not surprise, was a crowbar. "Fancy finding a crowbar in a place like this", he says to himself, thinking of the irony of all this.
Andy thought of hiding, but the curiosity was overwelming. He just had to have a look, to see one of the head-crab zombies for himself. He walked forward slowly, grasping hold of the crowbar so tight that it would almost kill him if he let go. Each step seemed, not only like a step closer to death, but a step closer to a dream. A dream where he is Gordon Freeman, and the world is out to get him.
His impatience takes over, and he begins to walk faster. Not far now. He gets to the destination of the noise. Nothing. Nothing there at all.
"WHAT, AAHH!!!", Andy screams, as two headcrabs jump out from under a car door. He falls to the floor. He looks up, and then swings the crowbar with a quick reflex, knocking one of the headcrabs for six into some flames nearby. He then pays all of his attentions on the remaining headcrab, waiting for it to pounce. But, it's hesitating, learning from what just happened. Andy, gets to his feet, and the headcrab takes has chance. Andy grabs the headcrab, with it mouthy pincers inches away from his face, and then throws it on to the flames as well.
Andy, still trying hard to beleive this is happening, catches his breath. But, no time, as he turns around and......TO BE CONTINUED