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I had to write this for an mock art exam with the title either as 'Underneath' or 'Above' or a mixture, it only had to be short piece so I thought I'd post it. Any comments are welcome:
Into the depths of the deepest, darkest and murkiest waters where no human has ever laid an eye upon is a secret world of bright colours, strange plant life and even stranger creatures. Concealed beneath thick weed and corals non-other than these creatures have ever grazed upon the ocean’s deepest floor.
The rocky bottom is the ideal environment for the uniquely adapted sea plants that prey on the smaller and weaker creatures that inhabit the depths. Spores of the coral gently float and dance in the very little light that manages to reach this world.
Not only have the plants adapted to this new environment, but also the creatures. They blend in with the partially eroded rocks that lay on the bottom of the dark silver sand. The weeds gently wrapping their ribbon like stems around the rock’s body. Their leaves slowly waving in the water, showing a gesture to the creatures that pass.
The creatures are not only camouflaged like rocks but they are also as tough as them, like a knight they wear their armour to protect themselves from the dangers that lurk beneath the coral and that lay under the sand, waiting for the ideal moment.
The stone like creatures are quite small and agile. They have leather like fins and a tail to match. Their eyes lay on top of their heads so they may lie in the shimmering sand as the water’s gentle force sweeps by.
Now not only do the spores of the coral dance up to the rare light, but now bubbles join the race as the creature begins to feast on the thick weed, releasing a little air from it’s mouth.
A shadow moves over the creature and its plant, the armoured knight retreats to its lair beneath the sand.
Into the depths of the deepest, darkest and murkiest waters where no human has ever laid an eye upon is a secret world of bright colours, strange plant life and even stranger creatures. Concealed beneath thick weed and corals non-other than these creatures have ever grazed upon the ocean’s deepest floor.
The rocky bottom is the ideal environment for the uniquely adapted sea plants that prey on the smaller and weaker creatures that inhabit the depths. Spores of the coral gently float and dance in the very little light that manages to reach this world.
Not only have the plants adapted to this new environment, but also the creatures. They blend in with the partially eroded rocks that lay on the bottom of the dark silver sand. The weeds gently wrapping their ribbon like stems around the rock’s body. Their leaves slowly waving in the water, showing a gesture to the creatures that pass.
The creatures are not only camouflaged like rocks but they are also as tough as them, like a knight they wear their armour to protect themselves from the dangers that lurk beneath the coral and that lay under the sand, waiting for the ideal moment.
The stone like creatures are quite small and agile. They have leather like fins and a tail to match. Their eyes lay on top of their heads so they may lie in the shimmering sand as the water’s gentle force sweeps by.
Now not only do the spores of the coral dance up to the rare light, but now bubbles join the race as the creature begins to feast on the thick weed, releasing a little air from it’s mouth.
A shadow moves over the creature and its plant, the armoured knight retreats to its lair beneath the sand.
I had to write this for an mock art exam with the title either as 'Underneath' or 'Above' or a mixture, it only had to be short piece so I thought I'd post it. Any comments are welcome:
Into the depths of the deepest, darkest and murkiest waters where no human has ever laid an eye upon is a secret world of bright colours, strange plant life and even stranger creatures. Concealed beneath thick weed and corals non-other than these creatures have ever grazed upon the ocean’s deepest floor.
The rocky bottom is the ideal environment for the uniquely adapted sea plants that prey on the smaller and weaker creatures that inhabit the depths. Spores of the coral gently float and dance in the very little light that manages to reach this world.
Not only have the plants adapted to this new environment, but also the creatures. They blend in with the partially eroded rocks that lay on the bottom of the dark silver sand. The weeds gently wrapping their ribbon like stems around the rock’s body. Their leaves slowly waving in the water, showing a gesture to the creatures that pass.
The creatures are not only camouflaged like rocks but they are also as tough as them, like a knight they wear their armour to protect themselves from the dangers that lurk beneath the coral and that lay under the sand, waiting for the ideal moment.
The stone like creatures are quite small and agile. They have leather like fins and a tail to match. Their eyes lay on top of their heads so they may lie in the shimmering sand as the water’s gentle force sweeps by.
Now not only do the spores of the coral dance up to the rare light, but now bubbles join the race as the creature begins to feast on the thick weed, releasing a little air from it’s mouth.
A shadow moves over the creature and its plant, the armoured knight retreats to its lair beneath the sand.
Into the depths of the deepest, darkest and murkiest waters where no human has ever laid an eye upon is a secret world of bright colours, strange plant life and even stranger creatures. Concealed beneath thick weed and corals non-other than these creatures have ever grazed upon the ocean’s deepest floor.
The rocky bottom is the ideal environment for the uniquely adapted sea plants that prey on the smaller and weaker creatures that inhabit the depths. Spores of the coral gently float and dance in the very little light that manages to reach this world.
Not only have the plants adapted to this new environment, but also the creatures. They blend in with the partially eroded rocks that lay on the bottom of the dark silver sand. The weeds gently wrapping their ribbon like stems around the rock’s body. Their leaves slowly waving in the water, showing a gesture to the creatures that pass.
The creatures are not only camouflaged like rocks but they are also as tough as them, like a knight they wear their armour to protect themselves from the dangers that lurk beneath the coral and that lay under the sand, waiting for the ideal moment.
The stone like creatures are quite small and agile. They have leather like fins and a tail to match. Their eyes lay on top of their heads so they may lie in the shimmering sand as the water’s gentle force sweeps by.
Now not only do the spores of the coral dance up to the rare light, but now bubbles join the race as the creature begins to feast on the thick weed, releasing a little air from it’s mouth.
A shadow moves over the creature and its plant, the armoured knight retreats to its lair beneath the sand.
I enjoyed it.
But, on a sort of 'constructive criticism' note, I thought the beginning was stronger than the end.
But, on a sort of 'constructive criticism' note, I thought the beginning was stronger than the end.
That was alright.
Except coral doesn't live very deep at all.
Except coral doesn't live very deep at all.
And if it did, it wouldn't be colourful.
Very nice hey tom like the new name (Space Potato)!
Shhs... it's a fantasy... :-/